Is that
the time,
he said,
I should
get my
things
and leaveWell don’t
let me
keep you,
she said,
for I have
others
to please
"All my life's buried here, heap earth upon it"
Is that
the time,
he said,
I should
get my
things
and leaveWell don’t
let me
keep you,
she said,
for I have
others
to please
Ramblings Of A Fragile Mind 
Very intriguing poem! It starts a story in my mind and compels me to fill in the blanks!
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Great! I’m glad you found it intriguing.
I wonder if your blanks would be the same as mine?! 😊🖤
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Interesting use of line breaks. Very effective. I re-read it and thought that the line, “I have others” would have worked very well as the end point. Nice bit of writing.
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Thank you for your kind words!
Sometimes I do wonder if, in my desire to rhyme, I do miss out on a better ending, so thanks for your feedback. It motivates me to keep going 🖤
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Keep going!
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That’s the end of the tale for me, I’m afraid…
But feel free to write a continuation yourself…
I’d love to read it! 👍🖤
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Not on this “less is more” discussion. I meant just keep going and there you go…more posts! Grear
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Ahhh OK!!
I’ll certainly keep trying! 😊
Shame I won’t get to read a possible response peice though! 😉🖤
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….great 🙄
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The dreaded typo… Happens to us all 😔🖤
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I have posted some sort of replay based on the “Sinderella” fairy tale idea. Thank you for the prompt!
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Oooh, I’m late to reading today so I can’t wait to see it! 😊🖤
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