I saw you looking
Over dinner
Your smile discreet
Hers a winner
I realised there
Was something more
When she sashayed
To the dance floor
I knew it then
In revelatory style
It’s obvious we
Won’t walk up the ailse
"All my life's buried here, heap earth upon it"
I saw you looking
Over dinner
Your smile discreet
Hers a winner
I realised there
Was something more
When she sashayed
To the dance floor
I knew it then
In revelatory style
It’s obvious we
Won’t walk up the ailse
Ah painful.
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I would guess so.
Thankfully this one is not autobiographical π€
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hahaha (Heart)
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ππ€
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Excellent stuff!
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Thank you! ππ€
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Realization hurts. π€π
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Absolutely π€π€
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The perfect poem to compliment my song Johnny Muff Grabber LOL
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Haha I reckon you’re right! π
Glad to have written something (albeit unwittingly) that compliments you’re words for a change! ππ€
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I should add a higher pitched spoken word intro of your poem to my song π
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That would be brilliant!!
And I absolutely LOVE that title too by the way!! ππ€
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I’d have to credit you though, would I just put intro by youlittlecharmer
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Yeah, definitely! Still not confident enough to use my real name! π¬
This is exciting though! I’ve never had my words in a song before! Plus your track is excellent!! ππ€
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thanks, work on it tomorrow
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changed it slightly but about the same
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No way.
You’ve not changed it slightly.
You’ve changed it to an INFINITELY better version than mine!! ππ
How I never thought of adding a few ‘mother fuckers’ is behind me. They are usually my stock in trade!
I’m so jealous.
This is AMAZING my friend!! And my first WP collaboration to boot.
You are a true talent! Brilliant! ππ€
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thanks π maybe I will set your words to music again in the future
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Anytime my friend, anytime! ππ€
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Revised the post and added a link to your poem π
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It reminds me of the intro to ‘Territorial Pissings’ by Nirvana.
Yet it also sounds quite like the singing mice from Disney’s Cinderella.
What a combo!! ππ€
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perfect π Definitely not meant to be as realistic as possible
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Objective achieved! ππ€
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This is very well written!
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Thanks Robin , I’m glad you think so! ππ€
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Love it!! π π€
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This one was great. Sad, but great. Well written!
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Thank you so much my friend!
Glad you enjoyed ππ€
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