Perhaps
this is
all I
deserve
And I
should
expect
more
For
penance
has to
be paid
To
those
my love
I swore
"All my life's buried here, heap earth upon it"
Perhaps
this is
all I
deserve
And I
should
expect
more
For
penance
has to
be paid
To
those
my love
I swore
Ramblings Of A Fragile Mind 
As a student of theology and Biblical languages, the idea of penance drives me crazy. It was a bad translation of the original Greek that made absolution into something its not.
But as poetry (and potentially as a personal story for you or someone you know), this is a well written and reflective piece.
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Thank you my friend.
You’re too kind as always.
I’m not an exponant the reward / penance mindset either. I may have a wee penchant for karmic theory, if anything, but I would have to bow to your superior knowledge on all things theological.
This was, as you identify, simply a case where a modern understanding of the words fit the overall tone of the peice.
I hope anyway… 🖤
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I hope I didn’t come across as attacking you. You definitely have the correct definition/understanding of the English word which did fit the tone of the piece. No issue there 🙂
The original Greek word is more in line with repenting and not “doing penance”. I won’t fill your comment section with the difference between the two definitions (there’s quite a bit.) So I certainly can’t blame you for something some translators messed up on 😆
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You didn’t come across that way at all my friend.
I have never felt attacked by any of your comments – even those in response to some of my more deliberately provocative rants on organised religion.
I’m all up for healthy conversations / debates / philosophising of any kind as, at the end of day, we’re all just guessing anyway…
Glad I got the literal definition/understanding of the word right though. Not doing that would have wounded me more than anything! 🤪🖤
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